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a result of my practise, controlling light and shadows.... please, give me your comments / critiques since i dont have any teacher for giving me directions and for my better improvements..
==== Stock used : mine : [link] flare >> photoshop renderer thanks to: ~ischarm-stock >> [link] *redheadstock >> [link] ==== last edited : May 22nd ----- I might not put any watermarks, but this this work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License. And you know that this is my deviation, my energy, mine... Comments
The light and shadows are good but you could have used a tiny less shadow. Other than that its good with the exception of the moon which could be proportioned better. It looks sort of like an oval instead of a sphere.
(This is my critique, posted here since I don't have paid membership) -- Ima Comic Genias! :3- [link] thanksss, sistaa
-- clubs : =ManipulateThis =Wonderful-World i love *devCRIT !!! yup, sista, i used to think about it but last night i'm too sleepy to start over
-- clubs : =ManipulateThis =Wonderful-World i love *devCRIT !!! done, sista
the shadows on top-left and right of the moon already fixed -- clubs : =ManipulateThis =Wonderful-World i love *devCRIT !!! Nice work
The dark blue light surrounding the moon is really neat, but the why are the stars too far away from the moon? it's like they are scared of it xD And the flare, so what is it's light source? If it's the moon I think it's too bright, so maybe some other light source? But the lighting you made in the leaves and the temple is really cool! and the birds in the moon is a really nice touch. and another thing... why is the moon so big? is the temple floating in the sky and is as high as we see the moon? But still, nice work Overall Vision Originality Technique Impact Critique courtesy of *devCRIT -- *PhotomanipulatorClub mermaid icon from ~KaineBelle that's why i called it "temple of the moon"
actually... it's a surreal deviation, because in real world, no way the moon seems so huge and produce a very bright flare like that thank you very much for your opinion i do really appreciate it!!! please, don't be hesitate to critique my other deviations.. thanksss -- clubs : =ManipulateThis =Wonderful-World i love *devCRIT !!! Oh, I see
Sure, I'll check out your gallery sometimes you're welcome -- *PhotomanipulatorClub mermaid icon from ~KaineBelle |
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I have to say, I love the colour scheme of your work. The greens of the plants in the foreground have just enough blue in them to ensure everybody knows it's night. I also love the dark blue sky in the background.
On the other hand though, I've never seen a blue moon before. I know there is the saying of "once in a blue moon", but did you actually see a blue moon before? In nature, the moon tends to be light, a bit yellowish, a bit like those old photographs in your grandmothers photoalbum showing of your granny as a baby: sepia. I think it would be great if the moon had more of the natural colour the same as the sky and the plants.
Another point that makes me wonder in this image is the light. Not the lighting on the plants, it's brilliant down there. But the moon is for once not that light. It wouldn't create such a star, nor would it overexpose the plants. So it makes me think there is a human made lightsource (maybe from a soccer field or something) just in front of the moon, casting light into the viewers direction. Maybe you tried to show that, but I guess you didn't.
And then again, the moon isn't light enough to be lighter than the stars directly around it? It doesn't really fit together with the flare part. It would be great if you used a mask to make the stars close to the moon far less visible than they are now, especially underneith the glow of the moon.
I really like all those little details you put in, the birds are just cute and give the image a living touch. It could have been to static, but the birds make it seem alife.
All in all, it's not a bad work!
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